the phone in the other

the phone in the other
room rings once and
refuses to carry your voice

the phone in the other-
world rings and rings
without disturbing a soul

 

Fresh ink. This is my subversion of “thoughts & prayers.” Constructive criticism welcome.

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innatejames

I am a writer for an e-Learning course vendor near Chicago.

4 thoughts on “the phone in the other”

  1. I’m not sure what it is you’re subverting, but that doesn’t lessen the impact of the poem itself. Two powerful and truthful images which bear rereading..

    1. yeah, my subversion wasn’t clear. People either think “thoughts & prayers” will fix everything or are useless. My attempted subversion was to suggest that if everyone’s thoughts and prayers were channeled and given a voice, they could change things. Thanks for your comment, Northie.

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