Amphitrite, The Forgotten Goddess

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[Image: page 241 of All the Light You Cannot See by Anthony Doerr. Most of the text has been blacked out. The remainder reads:]

The girl waits with her fist
she          the ocean
knows rope and drowned pleasure
her fingers whisk tidepools
her toes wonder how much
is true she simply listens
her bedroom fills with
scallops          whelks
she assumes the morning
will deliver neighbors

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Original Text:

ATLWCS p 241

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innatejames

I am a writer for an e-Learning course vendor near Chicago.

12 thoughts on “Amphitrite, The Forgotten Goddess”

  1. On first read, I thought this was a personification of the ocean. And I loved that you did that from Doerr’s book because the ocean is so important to that book and I loved that book so much. Then I realized the Greek myth thing was happening. Love.

  2. She – the ocean – knows rope and drowned pleasure. I loved this. I haven’t tried one of these erasure poems yet, but they seem so hard to do! It’s so cool what you all can pull out of a random piece of writing and make it something beautiful of your own 🙂

  3. This was beautifully crafted. Her fingers whisk tidepools pulled me into an image of a young woman whose home is the ocean. The ocean knows rope and drowned pleasure made me think for a bit – the ocean as a binding place, but a place that offers pleasure as well? The more I think about this and read it, the more I derive. Thank you for sharing this.

    1. Amphitrite was Poseidon’s wife. But there are no stories about her because Poseidon was a player. My intention for the rope and drowned pleasure was her falling in love and marrying Poseidon, only to be left tethered to the ocean by herself knowing that her husband’s fooling around with those nasty Naiads.

  4. I never know how to comment on a poem. But even I am able to say I really enjoyed the character you gave the ocean. 🙂

  5. Okay, you had me at the ocean being a woman, and the languid way she creates her environs was so perfect! I love how you took the original text and imbued it with such a different perspective and voice.

    1. I was all “Wait. Poseidon is a big deal god. How come I haven’t heard any stories about his wife? I know he has daughters. Is he a player?” And that’s how I learned about poor Amphitrite.

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